New Cartoon! FEEDBACK please!

spoooze! · Post by **spoooze!** » Sat Feb 25, 2006 2:45 am

Here's my newest cartoon. It's called "Frankenshopper".

http://home.earthlink.net/~jtn1989/hiya ... /id90.html

Enjoy! My team and I worked hard. I'd appreciate some feedback

James

ingie01 · Post by **ingie01** » Sat Feb 25, 2006 3:42 pm

Good work team-
Spooze, did you have a post where you listed your team members and their jobs? I am also interested in the amount of time spent on your production pre, during, post.

I like the idea of inferred violence and gory operations through camera moves.
too many "yes master" references for a short.
Drawing and coloring was great!
voice overs worked well as did the lip sync

Impressive!

spoooze! · Post by **spoooze!** » Sat Feb 25, 2006 6:28 pm

Thanks

Spooze, did you have a post where you listed your team members and their jobs?

Right here:

http://home.earthlink.net/~jtn1989/hiya ... /id22.html

Click on the names to see their jobs.

I am also interested in the amount of time spent on your production pre, during, post.

Pre: about 5 days to build backgrounds an characters.

During: About 4 weeks to animate

Post: A day or two to finish editing and finish animation that was not turned in

too many "yes master" references for a short.

I didn't write it so it's not my fault lol.

Drawing and coloring was great!
voice overs worked well as did the lip sync

Impressive!

Thanks

James

Toxic Hawk · Post by **Toxic Hawk** » Sat Feb 25, 2006 6:47 pm

Awwwwww, I wanna help!

But yes, good animation. However, some of the script could have been a tiny bit better (no offence to the script writer, was quite funny).

gochris · Post by **gochris** » Sat Feb 25, 2006 10:35 pm

I enjoyed this. I like the character designs. I thought the story was funny. Making it in black and white was a good choice. The acting from ther Moho characters was fun.

You guys keep getting better. On your next cartoon, you might consider running music under the dialogue. Music always seems to liven up patches of dialogue.

But overall, a fun cartoon! Keep making more!

Chris

red hamster · Post by **red hamster** » Sun Feb 26, 2006 3:22 am

Yes master but is kinda small. I suggest you (if you have enough space) to put a small versione as well as a 640x480 version.

it looks no much bigger than a postcard stamp ; the dl is faster but the toon is very less enjoiable .

spoooze! · Post by **spoooze!** » Sun Feb 26, 2006 2:54 pm

Yeah, maybe I should put it in the format I had and just make it a .zip file. I think I'll do that soon. I just put it up on the web in small format so people could see it and not download to the desktop.

James

red hamster · Post by **red hamster** » Sun Feb 26, 2006 5:32 pm

Yes master.

13YearsOldAnimator · Post by **13YearsOldAnimator** » Sat Mar 11, 2006 2:29 am

gj really cute ;D

jorgy · Post by **jorgy** » Sun Mar 12, 2006 12:42 am

Just a couple of notes....

First, it's a bit distracting to have titles while the camera is panning. And secondly, it feels like it could be tightened up a bit. When we're at the walmart (or walmart rip off... LOL) and then we're headed to the mall, I just felt like "so, okay, move it along. We could have done without that last scene."

I did like the script - thought it was pretty funny. I also thought the animation was good, and was getting better and better.

Maybe for your next movie, try something completely different?

Postality · Post by **Postality** » Sun Mar 12, 2006 2:53 am

strange cartoon.

made me laugh a bit though, good job.

"why do you keep saying that?", "Yes Master!" LOL