The Waterfall
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The Waterfall
This is my first animated short created with Moho Pro 12. Any comments that help to get better are appreciated. Thx for watching it.
https://vimeo.com/260500361
https://vimeo.com/260500361
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Re: The Waterfall
How adorable! I love it.
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A really really nice one. Compliments.
Your storytelling is rather unusual to me so I was surprised from scene to scene. In a good way, of course ,)
My only remark would go towards the stereo. The crow is a bit too far on the right channel while it sits in the middle of the scene. Audio / the sound is great but at first, I looked to my right, through my window ,)
Full sails!
Your storytelling is rather unusual to me so I was surprised from scene to scene. In a good way, of course ,)
My only remark would go towards the stereo. The crow is a bit too far on the right channel while it sits in the middle of the scene. Audio / the sound is great but at first, I looked to my right, through my window ,)
Full sails!
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Thank you.w3rew0lfgirl_99 wrote:How adorable! I love it.
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Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate it. As for sound, you're right, honestly I did not pay too much attention now on finetuning the sound effects, so I used them as they were. Next time I'm sure I'll spend some time on it. Cheers.Maestral wrote:A really really nice one. Compliments.
Your storytelling is rather unusual to me so I was surprised from scene to scene. In a good way, of course ,)
My only remark would go towards the stereo. The crow is a bit too far on the right channel while it sits in the middle of the scene. Audio / the sound is great but at first, I looked to my right, through my window ,)
Full sails!
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Overall a nice little short. I particularly like the backgrounds.
I think the sound design / mix could do with a little more polish. For example I found the laser shots out of place.
Story-wise I like the idea but am not sure about transforming the crow/raven into a colourful birdie. It felt like a step down, considering how relatively intelligent crows and ravens are. But that really is just nit-picking.![Wink ;)](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
Marc
I think the sound design / mix could do with a little more polish. For example I found the laser shots out of place.
Story-wise I like the idea but am not sure about transforming the crow/raven into a colourful birdie. It felt like a step down, considering how relatively intelligent crows and ravens are. But that really is just nit-picking.
![Wink ;)](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
Marc
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The crow was particularly good, the slide was a nice touch. ![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_biggrin.gif)
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Hi Marc,mrc wrote:Overall a nice little short. I particularly like the backgrounds.
I think the sound design / mix could do with a little more polish. For example I found the laser shots out of place.
Story-wise I like the idea but am not sure about transforming the crow/raven into a colourful birdie. It felt like a step down, considering how relatively intelligent crows and ravens are. But that really is just nit-picking.
Marc
thank you for your comments. As for sound in general, it's a bit of a headache for me since I have no experience in it at all. Ok, basic things like where the sounds come from at which level I understand, but I should spend some time on it to learn. Furthermore I have only a basic sound editing software, so as of now I have my limits in this aspect. If you can suggest anything where I can pick up some knowledge on that and which softwares are worth to try, I'd really appreciate that.
The crow to goldfinch transformation I thought could be a good sign of season change. Crow represents winter in my country and colourful little songbirds usually represent springtime, that's why I chose them. Honestly I did not dig into biological spheres and in my experience in tales anything can transform to anything (like human can be a brainless stick suddenly), so I thought it might not be such a big issue.
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Thanks again,
Peter
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Thank you.chucky wrote:The crow was particularly good, the slide was a nice touch.
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An amazing piece overall - with some great animation and scenery.
My greatest issue is that you have created such a nice Winter scene - that it feels spoilt when Spring comes along!
My greatest issue is that you have created such a nice Winter scene - that it feels spoilt when Spring comes along!
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Sam
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Sam
Re: The Waterfall
Thanks for your nice words.SimplSam wrote:An amazing piece overall - with some great animation and scenery.
My greatest issue is that you have created such a nice Winter scene - that it feels spoilt when Spring comes along!
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