Please critique the sh*t out of this little animation
Posted: Sun Feb 18, 2018 10:09 pm
Guys, I've made a short clip that I'd like to show you. I mostly use Moho for little bits of animation here and there, but this one turned into a full-fledged mini-cartoon. It's supposed to make you chuckle. If it doesn't, please tell me: I genuinely want to know how successful my brand of humour is and how I can make it more effective.
It's not on Youtube, so I'll just leave a link: http://www.justaboutfun.com/video/Afterhours.mp4
I'd *really* like to hear some critique from you. You can make it as harsh as you want, I don't care. To get you started, here's some thoughts I can share on my own work.
Visual style: I'm not good at drawing, and also I wanted to utilize a "quick and dirty" style because I don't have that much free time on my hands, so I opted for something in the vein of South Park and Cyanide and Happiness (believe it or not, I only found out about asdfmovie after this cartoon was done). I hope all the background elements are easily readable.
Animation: Now that I think of it, the pace is probably a bit too slow. It should be more snappy, more energetic, but that's not an easy thing to fix, now that the thing is done. I'll just have to keep this in mind when working on future projects. Also, the running animation looks somewhat dull, and the tie is behaving weird. Definitely gonna work this over next time.
Music: I basically cobbled it on the fly, and the result was surprisingly easy on the ear, except for the drums. Yeah, the drums suck, but the song by and large gets the job done. I'll probably fix this part sometime soon, when I'm feeling less lazy.
Voiceover: I wanted to emulate South Park, but ended up with something out of the early 2000s Newgrounds. It lacks character. I'll probably have to find another approach to voicing my movies, but not sure how to go about it yet.
It's not on Youtube, so I'll just leave a link: http://www.justaboutfun.com/video/Afterhours.mp4
I'd *really* like to hear some critique from you. You can make it as harsh as you want, I don't care. To get you started, here's some thoughts I can share on my own work.
Visual style: I'm not good at drawing, and also I wanted to utilize a "quick and dirty" style because I don't have that much free time on my hands, so I opted for something in the vein of South Park and Cyanide and Happiness (believe it or not, I only found out about asdfmovie after this cartoon was done). I hope all the background elements are easily readable.
Animation: Now that I think of it, the pace is probably a bit too slow. It should be more snappy, more energetic, but that's not an easy thing to fix, now that the thing is done. I'll just have to keep this in mind when working on future projects. Also, the running animation looks somewhat dull, and the tie is behaving weird. Definitely gonna work this over next time.
Music: I basically cobbled it on the fly, and the result was surprisingly easy on the ear, except for the drums. Yeah, the drums suck, but the song by and large gets the job done. I'll probably fix this part sometime soon, when I'm feeling less lazy.
Voiceover: I wanted to emulate South Park, but ended up with something out of the early 2000s Newgrounds. It lacks character. I'll probably have to find another approach to voicing my movies, but not sure how to go about it yet.