my first clip , please I need your comments

hany rabi3 · Post by **hany rabi3** » Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:05 am

hello, this is my first clip after a long time of self learning
i will be very happy with your comments and advises
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OJbW6vzVqbk

Post by **Víctor Paredes** » Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:23 am

this is pretty good. I like the anticipations and head turns. I think you have been reading this forum for a while, don't you?

Just one think I think you should care on another short. The sound is pretty annoying and it's full of sounds cliches over and over. Try to find some "normal" stuff, I mean, not all sounds has to be "funny".
But, anyway, it's all about the animation, and you have made it very well. I'll keep my eye to see your next works.

PARKER · Post by **PARKER** » Mon Oct 12, 2009 2:00 am

Nice work, i remenber that my first animation wasnt as good as this one.
keep it up.

Imago · Post by **Imago** » Mon Oct 12, 2009 8:44 am

Goos work!
Improve soundtrack, on internet there are a lot of free sound sites.

hany rabi3 · Post by **hany rabi3** » Tue Oct 13, 2009 10:38 am

thanks for all your notices
it will help me sure

spoooze! · Post by **spoooze!** » Tue Oct 13, 2009 9:29 pm

Animation looks good. Sounds... not so much. If you can get the sound FX right, you'll have something pretty good here! I'd recommend just losing the sounds and finding some nice royalty free music. There's a ton on Kevin Mcleod's site:

http://incompetech.com/m/c/royalty-free/