synthsin75 wrote:I would be VERY surprised if anyone volunteered their time for that script.
Never before have truer words been spoken.
The script is sort of built in chunks. I read the first one (in bed) and it was possibly the most awful thing this forum has seen with the lone exception of that koala cartoon.
It's needless profanity and no story. I skipped directly to the end and there was a reference to "what the writers come up with." Self-referential humor like that is never funny. It's hackneyed at best.
The biggest, glaring flaw is: who cares? Why is moving to Vermont such a big thing? Why does it matter to the characters or the audience? Does Vermont contain terrors and horrors to chill the soul or is it a non-stop, dragout adventure? We'll never know because it's not addressed.
It's always good to have dreams and want to create something. Try to remember though, I can sit all alone and curse. Nothing's inherently entertaining about it. If people are going to watch, there needs to be a reason. They have to like someone or something about the show. There needs to be a hook. This has none of that. Take it back to the drawing board and work on some kind of plot and character development, otherwise this is definitely a one-off that will go nowhere and gain no attention from audiences or collaborators.